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Bluestar; Leader of ThunderClan « Thread Started on May 24, 2008, 1:48pm »
Name:Bluestar
Past and Future Names:Bluekit,Bluepaw,Bluepelt
Gender:She-cat
Age:24 moons
Lives: 9 lives
Clan:ThunderClan
Rank:Leader
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Personality:Bluestar is a kind and mild-tempered cat. That is to anyone younger then her. She has this maternal instinct that goes toward cats younger then her, helping her keep her temper and be all sweet and soft toward those younger then her. But with cats older its a different story. If one of them do something wrong she'll get all short-tempered and tell them how they know better and how they shouldn't be doing that. Her patience will even run thin for leaders and deputies, even medicine cats from time to time. She can be quite comforting when someone needs it, anyone actually. Even a different clan-cat or a rogue. Bluestar will also help any cat in need, again from any clan, or even if they don't have a clan.
Though Bluestar is also quite laughable and easy-going with her friends. She'll laugh occasionally when cats are angry, her personality coming back from appreticehood. She'll get into mischeif from time-to-time as well when she becomes to stressed or overwhelmed.
Description:Bluestar has bright blue eyes, as blue as a summer sky. Her pelt falls elegantly around her, like dripping streams of a fountain. Her pelt is a light gray,as light as a soon-to-be rain cloud. However, her pelt becomes easily matted. Her tail,paws,and muzzle are tipped with silver.Her nose is a bright cherry pink.
History: Bluestar was born on a cold winter night.She was close to death but she managed to stay alive. The only sibling she lost was her brother,Winterkit, who has frozen to death from the cold. As she grew older she became stronger. Unfortuanatley, her parents both died in a fire that had taken place when she was only 7 moons old. Many cats had died then. But her sister had died when she first became a warrior when a monster hit her, the monster was driven by a drunken Twoleg. Bluestar was pretty much the strongest apprentice in the clan. This strength made her become a warrior a moon early! When she became a warrior she met a tom named Flashstrike. He was a kind and caring tom. But she was unlucky when he died in a battle, a moon after she had her kits, Stonekit and Mistykit (later known as Stoneclaw and Mistypelt). By the time she was about 16 moons, she already had an apprentice and was named deputy of ThunderClan. Times were glum when Cinderstar,the former ThunderClan leader, died when a Twoleg had cut down a tree and Cinderstar was killed by it, as it was her last life. Bluestar was nervous when she became leader. But she soon gained confidence in herself. And now she is still leading ThunderClan and hasn't lost a life.
Roleplay Example: Bluestar stood on the Highrock. "All cats old enough to catch their own prey gather under the Highrock for a clan meeting!" She yowled. Her yowl echoed across the trees. "Finchpaw would you join me on the Highrock please?" She asked the apprentice. Finchpaw leaped up beside Bluestar. "Briarfrost, are you satisfiend that Finchpaw is ready to become a warrior?" She asked Briarfrost. The tom gave a nod. "Yes, she is ready." The tom mewed. "I, Bluestar, leader of ThunderClan, call upon my warrior ancestors to look down on this apprentice. She has trained hard to learn the ways of your noble code, and I commend her a warrior in her turn. Finchpaw do you promise to uphold the warrior code, and protect and defend this Clan?" She yowled. "I do." The cream colored apprentice mewed. "Then by the power of StarClan, I give you your warrior name. Finchpaw, from this moment on you will be known as Finchsong! The Clan honors bravery and loyalty, and we welcome you as a full warrior of ThunderClan!" She yowled. Bluestar rested her muzzle on the newly made warrior's head and Finchsong licked Bluestar's shoulder in respect. "Finchsong you must sit vigil by the camp entrance tonight, as it is your first night as a warrior." She mewed softly and the warrior bounded to the entrance.
Bluestar leaped off of the Highrock and entered her den. She laid in the moss covered nest and slowly drifted off to sleep. When she awoke she realized it was raining. Lighting crackled in the distance. The young cat stepped out of her den and hurried to the fresh-kill pile. She snatched up a vole and hurried back to her den. She laid in her nest and slowly began eating. Thunder crashed and she heard a squeal. Bluestar leaped up and bounded to the nursery just to see a kit huddled against its mother. She sighed and ran back to her den, trying not to get wet. But she was out of luck. By the time she got to her den she was completley soaked to the bone. She finished her meal and laid in her nest. After a while, she drifted to sleep.
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Re: Bluestar; Leader of Thunderclan « Reply #1 on May 24, 2008, 2:23pm »
Lesseee..... Clan, no matter where, should be a capital 'C'. There should be a space after every punctuation mark except quotation marks. Highrock should have a lowercase 'r'. The roleplay example made no sense; you called a meeting then skipped through it, which you wouldn't do in a normal post. You have to say in the history how the parents and everybody died, unless you are playing them yourself or putting them up for adoption. Also, Brierfrost should be Briarfrost. Run a spell check, and check it for grammar manually. Oh, and in one part of the personality you say Rosey instead of Bluestar.
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